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The first sentence of what would become paragraph 5 of the "Conclusion" to Walden makes its initial appearance in Draft E. Thoreau makes additional changes to the sentence in F. In the excerpts below from the manuscript pages where the sentence appears, we see Thoreau inserting and deleting various adjectives, adverbs, and phrases that qualify his assertions about what he learned from his experience at the pond. Some of his changes also seem intended to tighten up the wording and increase the impact of what he has to say. In E, many of Thoreau's revisions are in pencil. In F they are almost all in ink.
At the top of this page from E, Thoreau has made many changes in pencil. What did he learn? "I learned this by my experiment" becomes "I learned this at least by my experiment." Implication: he learned many things but wants to single out this one thing in conclusion. The qualifying words "endeavors to," "quite," "wholly," and "in a measure" seem to make his claim about finding success by advancing "confidently" a little more–to pick up on his own word—measured.
After re-copying the sentence in F, Thoreau continues to revise, this time almost entirely in ink. (The word "and" is deleted in pencil as well as ink, and what appears to have been a pencilled insertion between "advances" and "confidently" has been rubbed out.) Noe that the final words of the sentence have been deleted, with their reference to a "result" answering to "faith," the sentence puts more emphasis on "success." (The emphasis is enhanced, too, by Thoreau's decision to strike "quite unexpected.") However, Thoreau retains "endeavors to," which he first inserted in E. While the sentence gets a little bolder in F, then, it retains the idea that endeavoring to life your imagined life is the important thing. Striving itself might be regarded as a kind of success.